Second Audience Feedback
Like we did previously we showed a newer cut of our trailer to a selection of people in order to gain some feedback. At this point our trailer was far closer to completion as the music although not the final piece was very close to how the final track would sound. We had also begun making our graphics and had completed half of them along with putting in our first ident. We had also made our title, which we created using ink in water and placed this in.
Notes from the feedback:
Notes from the feedback:
- 2nd shot, remove and place at the end
- For the 2nd set of graphics, use a different font, perhaps the same as the title?
- Need to make those graphics fit into the style of the title, perhaps add a clipping mask of ink
- 4 star empire review breaks up the suspense, use shot of her getting grabbed
- Maybe add a boom and fade back in after the black
- 2 car shots don't work
- Take out 'improv side car 1' use it to make it clear that they're in a car
- Hold longer on the 3 shot, to send the message that they can't decide
- 4 stars should be placed her, between the shot of them not being able to decide and the car in order to show that they are separate
- Montage, layer in booms
- Music, hold at end and ramp back up
- Boom on the black at end
- Title should come in slower
- Ink drop needs more time
- Final music, ink drop should be in silence
- Use more booms, boom from title to credits
- Add a sound for the title, perhaps the breathing or clock??
As this was close to our final version we hoped that we wouldn't have too many negatives, thankfully we didn't as we took the advice on board from last time and made the necessary changes. Overall the main pointers were to clean up the title a bit, this we knew as we had only just put it in as well as change up the narrative graphics as at the moment they are fairly similar to each other. We were also advised to remove several shots which don't work, this is completely understandable. We also had plenty of positive feedback particularly towards our Full Circle ident and the title. We were were thankful that the title came out how it did, as when filming it we encountered several problems such as the reflection.
AF
EJ
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Adam - Magazine Analyisis
As I'm targeting a mass market in my magazine, I researched Total Film and Empire. These two magazines are very similar in style and I will aim to adhere to these conventions. You can see many different conventions which are used throughout, notably the large title behind the central image and a tag line above the title. In these magazines, a lot of action is going on in the cover with a lot of different parts, given a cluttered but specific feel.
I extremely like the use of a bar to showcase other films, this gives the cover a professional feel that I hope to replicate. The title of the film is also shown centrally, and covers the whole page. I also hope to include a puff to showcase another film along with a bar at the bottom, giving a brief teaser to what's inside the magazine.
AF
Emmas Magazine Analysis
When researching into current magazines, I found the ways in which they present their content to the audience greatly varied. Magazines such as Empire and Total Film cater for a mass audience, making content easily visible on the front cover so the potential consumer is aware of the best features. Magazines such as these, vastly advertise their content, selling the magazine on the content rather than the name. Despite this, it could be suggested that film fanatics are also interested in these mainstream magazines, as the advertisement content at the back includes fan paraphernalia.
In contrast, magazines such as Clash and Little White Lies aim at a niche audience, primarily featuring arthouse and indie films. As people buy these types of magazines for the name and reputation, minimal advertising is present on the front cover giving it a very professional and minimalist feel. Sight and Sound magazine strikes a contrast between mass audience and indie magazines, showing interest in both areas. For my own work, even though I prefer the design of magazines such as Clash, I want to create a cross between Sight and Sound and Empire. I believe that this will strike a balance between stylised design and practicality, testing my abilities to produce a convincing magazine.
EJ
First audience feedback
We showed a very rough draft to several people in order to get a grasp of how our trailer was shaping up. At this point our trailer had all the shots from the shot list put in with the correct length, along with a 1st draft of the music. We had only put in black spaces in place of the titles/graphics.
After showing them our trailer we asked for tips on what needed to be improved:
After showing them our trailer we asked for tips on what needed to be improved:
- Soundtrack needs more drama, and crescendo
- As a trailer needs to be more thrilling, with the montage being quicker
- Sound/dialogue needs to come in much tighter as they speak
- Layering of sound
- Too much posing in the shots
- Opening and closing with the same shot??? Cut one
- Fit quick shots to sound, maybe longer
- Doorbell replaced with a knock
- Longer black after the graphics
- Cut tighter on the opening of the door
- Spade in Act 1 shown too early, makes the job appear to be something that it's not
- Shot of house needed, ESSENTIAL
- Remove echo
- Bag thrown down too slow
- Too long on cocking of gun
- Everything is too placed
- Split audio 'lets go' over establishing shot of house
- Music: Needs more drama
- Some shot needed of them breaking into the hosue
- 'We're done here' needs to be far quicker
- Noise of door, doesn't work
- Act 2/3 needs more danger, faster cuts, more happening, quicker, tighter montage
- 'What are we going to do with her 'could come earlier, soundbridge + split audio edit
- Pull out to the three shot later???
- Start with single line 'What are we going to do with her' perhaps???
- 'We can't kill her' in the montage???
Overall the main pointers are the music needs to be faster and every shot needs to be far tighter. These are both areas that we know need to be improved and we are already working on, as the music is only currently in it's first draft and we've only just begun editing the whole piece together. We also received plenty of praise, particularly surrounding the stylised nature of the shots and the overall feel of the trailer
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